The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram displays the floor structure of a public library 20 years ago and now. Looking from an
overall
perspective,
it is clear that
what stands out from the map is that it has become more modern and developed.
Firstly
, one of the changes is that tables and chairs from the middle of the library have been removed and at present it is an empty area. On the right-hand side of the diagram, there has been an equity desk from where people could buy tickets and return
books
, but now there is a cafe.
Instead
of the lecture
room
, 20 years ago there was a children’s book selection. In the past, between the children's book
room
and equity desks there was just an adult non-fiction
books
section,
while
now there are adult fiction
books
, an information desk and self-service machines.
In addition
, on the northwest side of the
library
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there were CDs, videos and computer games archives but that
room
was extended and at the moment there are two sofas, the children’s fiction selection and a special place for storytelling events.
As well as
the computer games area, the adult fiction
books
were removed and replaced with all reference
books
.
Finally
, the reading
room
with newspapers and magazines was demolished and a computer
room
was built.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, room with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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