The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

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The bar chart depicts the average number of

hours

per

day

tourists

from different countries spent on leisure activities in Greece in August 2019. The

tourists

are categorized by nationality:

Chinese

American

Turkish

, and

Brazilian

Overall

, reading books was the most popular

activity

among

Chinese

and

American

tourists

while

going to the beach was the most

favored

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activity

for

Turkish

and

Brazilian

tourists

. Visiting places was the least popular

activity

for

Chinese

tourists

, with other nationalities

also

spending less time on

this

activity

compared to reading and beach activities.

Chinese

tourists

spent the most time reading books, with an average of 8

hours

per

day

while

American

tourists

spent 5

hours

per

day

this

activity

In contrast

Turkish

and

Brazilian

tourists

spent the most time at the beach, with

Turkish

tourists

averaging 5

hours

and

Brazilian

tourists

hours

per

day

. Visiting places was the least popular

activity

among

Chinese

tourists

, who only spent 1 hour per

day

on it.

American

and

Turkish

tourists

spent 3

hours

per

day

visiting places,

while

Brazilian

tourists

spent 2

hours

per

day

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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

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