In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case? do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Most people in several countries think about possessing their accommodation,
while
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other
suggest that Fix the agreement mistake
others
to lease
for Change the verb form
leasing
short
time is less effective. In Correct article usage
a short
this
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essay
I will discuss some of the reasons why owning is Add a comma
essay,
popular
than renting Correct quantifier usage
more popular
one
. The main reason Use synonyms
the
having Correct article usage
apply
own
roof over your head is the important thing in our lifestyle, which is Correct pronoun usage
your own
guarantee
being successful. The evidence for Wrong verb form
guaranteeing
this
came from uncountable examples right now. The individuals who Linking Words
has
Change the verb form
have
estate
Correct article usage
an estate
does
not Correct subject-verb agreement
do
worried
about getting Change the verb form
worry
roof
, Add an article
a roof
Linking Words
subsequently
they have to pay attention to achieve Add a comma
subsequently,
another important things
and realize their ambition. Around the beginning of the mortgage approval, it was a common practice in Kazakhstan citizens to make Replace the adjective
another important thing
other important things
agreement
to buy some apartments . After Add an article
an agreement
that
it would be possible to Add a comma
that,
realaize
Correct your spelling
realise
another opportunities
. Today, there are very few people who want to rent rather than a buyer. Replace the adjective
another opportunity
other opportunities
For instance
, my Linking Words
closely
friend Change the adverb
close
have
got Change the verb form
has
one
flat in Almaty and Use synonyms
try
to get another Wrong verb form
is trying
one
in Shymkent. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, people who Linking Words
renting
estate from Wrong verb form
rent
owner
Add an article
the owner
an owner
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
could not
invest for their future and generation, Wrong verb form
cannot
instead
that they partly repay the Linking Words
owners
debt, Change noun form
owner's
likewise
giving Linking Words
assist
to Replace the word
assistance
main
loaner in Correct article usage
the main
this
way Linking Words
make
a reason to waste money which were Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
earn by
hard work whole week or month. Most of our Wrong verb form
earned
habitants
know Correct your spelling
inhabitants
same
situation in Change the article
the same
big
city. Add an article
the big
a big
For example
, Linking Words
in
Change preposition
apply
Almaty
Add a comma
Almaty,
one
of the biggest Use synonyms
agglomeration
in our country has much more Change to a plural noun
agglomerations
persons
who Replace the word
people
moonlighting
from each part of Wrong verb form
moonlight
country
need to lease Add an article
the country
apartment
from Add an article
an apartment
owner
and have to pay for accommodation during all worktime. Add an article
the owner
In contrast
, Linking Words
instead
of paying for Linking Words
human
who possess on house or flat non-residents partly invest their income Fix the agreement mistake
humans
to
future own estate or their children. To summarize, all situation depends on each case. If Change preposition
in
workable
human has Add an article
a workable
the workable
job
out of Add an article
a job
city
and there Add an article
the city
are have
all Verb problem
apply
comfortable
Correct article usage
the comfortable
condition
for life, Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
infrastructure
for Correct word choice
and infrastructure
family
, it Correct article usage
the family
has no
Verb problem
is not
necessity
to live in Replace the word
necessary
city
and Add an article
the city
a city
has
not Unnecessary verb
apply
to
rent Fix the infinitive
apply
any
flat, they have to buy Correct determiner usage
a
Correct your spelling
that
thats
rather than living alone and far from childrenCorrect your spelling
that
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