The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. • You should write at least 150 words. • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The bar charts provide key information about health problems by
Age
and, Gender in the United States of America. The units are measured in thousands.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that the men
and women aged 65 and above have the highest numbers among the age
groups. In addition
, men
's figures have significant numbers ,whereas
women much less than men
's.
According to
what is shown, men
aged 29-44 have a lower risk of having a heart attack. Meanwhile, the age
of 45 to 64 is the opposite,the numbers jumped by approximately 300 thousand
. For men
aged 65 and over,is a little higher around 20 thousand
.
In terms of women, aged 29-44 are significantly under men
. By the age
of 45-64, it increased from 3 to 136 thousand
. And finally
, the age
of 65 and above soared from 136 to 374 , and it is about 242 thousand
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, men, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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