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Formal examinations are the only effective way to assess a student's performance. Continual assessment such as coursework and projects is not a satisfactory way to do this. Do you agree or disagree?

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One of the key challenges that an education institute faces nowadays is to decide the
evaluation
 process of
students
' performance. Some people cite that the
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 and traditional method of formal examination is the only best method for
evaluation
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I firmly stand with those who believe that modern and more continuous assessment methods
such
 as assignments, classes, and projects are
also
 fairly effective and satisfactory. On the one hand, as the name suggests, continual assessments are more frequent which leads to aggregate performance reviews providing better
evaluation
.
For instance
, those student who did not perform well will have a few more chances to improve their score. Considering
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Secondly
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 examinations.
Although
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, it is not the best, where pupils can cheat the system by
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 hours only. Stating that
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 exam is the best is
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students
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 unchecked. In conclusion, the purpose of
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