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Most people accept that we now live in a globalised world but not everyone agrees this is beneficial. To what extent is globalisation a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answers and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Currently, Even though our world
are
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 considered to be in
globalized
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a globalized
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 era, which I really agree too, people still debate about
are
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 there more advantages or disadvantages
?
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 In my
opinions
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, I think
there
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 are beneficial to people more. I accept that now we live in
globalized
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 world as we can obviously see when we travel to
other country
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another country
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, we not only see local cuisine but
also
wide
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 variety of international
food
for example
of
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Italian
food
 that now can be adapted and
blend
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 with
many
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 cultural
food
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foods
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 around the world
such
 as spaghetti which can mix with
Thai
food
 to be Tom-yum spaghetti or with Chinese
food
 known as mala spaghetti. I believe
this
 is a small thing but strong
evident
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 for
globalization
. On the one hand,
globalization
 has many benefits for us in various
section
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. One of
an
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 outstanding
part
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 that
enhance
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 in terms of economics and societal culture. Global connectivity facilitates various social roles, including trade, contractual agreements, and services
lead
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 to the driving of economies.
For instance
,
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food
 industry
that
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cuisines from every corner of the globe traverse borders.
Thai
 cuisine,
for example
, is found globally unexcepted
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 which
in
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 the upside down.
Moreover
,
this
inspire
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 cultural fusion, elevating the diversity and value of
food
, which in turn impacts the quality of life, society, and cultural change in
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 efficient way.
On the other hand
,
globalization
also
 has drawbacks
due to
 the result
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 “Loss of culture”.
According to
Thai
 culture in the past, we often wore traditional
thai
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 outfits like sabai or ate
food
 with our hands.
However
, in the current era influenced by jeans,
spoon
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 and
fork
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 from
Western
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causing
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those traditions
are
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disappear
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. In summary,
globalization
 has both negatives and positives but I consider it to give us benefits
over
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since
which
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we can
thinking
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 in
way
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 that the culture is not lost but just
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 or
combine
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combines
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 with each other in order for the country to be
civilize
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 and develop even more.
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task achievement
It would be beneficial to further develop and organize your ideas to comprehensively present both the advantages and disadvantages of globalization. Make sure to clearly state your stance and consistently support it with relevant examples.
coherence cohesion
Work on enhancing the clarity of your ideas by organizing your paragraphs more logically. Each paragraph should ideally present a single, clearly defined point supported by relevant examples. This will aid in the overall coherence and cohesion of the essay.
task achievement
Your essay acknowledges both the positives and negatives of globalization, showing an understanding of the topic's complexity.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion present in the essay help in framing and summarizing your main points adequately.
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