Some people think that robots are impotant for human's development. Other's think that robots have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In today's world,
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robots
are being used in every sector of the industry.
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of
individual
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individuals
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believes that
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robots
Roberts
has
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prime importance in
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growth;
Whereas
,
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others
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do not and
agrue
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agree
argue
this
.
However
, they blame
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robots
Roberts
for
detoriating
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deteriorating
society.
This
essay will discuss both
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views and provide my opinion with
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.
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A group
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of
individual
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individuals
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believes that robots are important for
humans
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development.
This
can be verified by acknowledging the use of reborts in
car
manufacturing.
This
has helped many
car
companies to increase the production rate and match the
demand
.
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, during
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the pandemic
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pandemic
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most of the
car
manufacturing plants were closed, which
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led to
increase
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an increase
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in
demand
.
However
, to match the
demand
companies opted for
reborts
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reports
reboots
and within 1 year there
were
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enough
suppy
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supply
to match the
demand
. In
this
case, robots can lead to
massive
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car
production rate and ultimately
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to
humans
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human
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development.
On the other hand
,
other's
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others
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believe that
roborts
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robots
Roberts
has
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have
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detoriating
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detrimental
effects on
the
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apply
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society.
This
is because
,
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robots are made of thousands of sensors and
while
in use
releases
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radiation which
are
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is
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harmful
for
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to
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humans
in
longer
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the long
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run.
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, one study
perfomed
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performed
by
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scientists
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at Havard
university
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in
cognative
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cognitive
science stated that If
humans
are exposed to sensors which
emits
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radiation
then
chances
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the chances
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of cancer in a longer is 72%.
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grammar
Proofread for minor grammatical errors and typos, such as 'roborts' instead of 'robots', and 'reborts' instead of 'robots'. These can detract from the overall quality of the essay.
structure
The conclusion could be strengthened by clearly summarizing your opinion and the main points discussed. This can provide a more rounded and definitive end to your essay.
grammar
Ensure that punctuation and capitalization are used correctly throughout. For instance, 'Group of individual' should be 'A group of individuals' and 'Havard' should be 'Harvard'.
structure
The essay has a clear structure and addresses both views regarding the impact of robots on society. This is essential for scoring well in task response.
content
Relevant and specific examples, such as the use of robots in car manufacturing during the pandemic, and the study from Harvard, enrich the essay and add credibility to your arguments.
content
Main points are well-supported and explained, which helps to demonstrate a thorough understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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