The charts below show changes in student enrolment by degree at a university in Canada in 1980 and 2000.

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The two pie charts show

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how students’

enrolment

degree

changed at a university in Canada in 1980 and 2000. One notable observation is the significant prevalence of Bachelor’s

degree

, with reaching 76% in 1980.

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was followed by

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an Associated

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degree

(13%), Master’s

degree

(9%), and doctoral

degree

(2%). These figures demonstrate that the variety of

enrolment

of students was not seen in 1980.

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, in 2000, the trend was substantially changed.

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students’

enrolment

Bachelors’

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Bachelor’

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degree

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degrees

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decreased dramatically, students’

enrolment

in other degrees surged. The percentage of

enrolment

in Bachelor’s

degree

halved by 42%, but the proportion of

enrolment

in Master’s

degree

almost quadrupled by 35%.

In addition

, the percentage of

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degree

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degrees

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increased to 18% and those of doctoral

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degrees

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over doubled, with a figure of 5%.

To sum up

it is clear that

the Bachelor’s

degree

experienced a striking decline in

enrolment

in 2000,

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while other

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types of degrees including Master’s

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degrees

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, Associate

degree

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, and Doctoral

degree

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degrees

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soared, making

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more diversity in

students

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enrolment

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university

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universities

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in Canada.

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