The relatively recent development of games on phones, computers, and TV consoles is extremely popular with people all over the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such electronic games?

Nowadays, the gaming industry is exorbitantly increasing. Many
people
believe that
,
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the trend of playing
games
on technology like mobile phones, desktops, and
playstations
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PlayStations
have
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has
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positive effects.
This
essay will discuss both perspectives and argue that, despite some benefits, the disadvantages of accessing
games
on screen
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outweigh their advantages.
Initially
, the foremost drawback the online
games
play is the increment of the screentime.
People
of all ages spend hours playing these
games
. The
games
are designed in a way to get
people
addicted and
increases
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dopamine
due to
which
people
lose
the
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track of time and
ditatch
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detach
ditch
themselves from the outside world. A study was conducted in Ohio that showcased the
comparision
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comparison
between
people
playing online
games
frequently and the
people
who played rarely. It was evident from the study that the frequent players faced
problems
in communicating face to face, gained weight,
have
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more
eye sight
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eyesight
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issues and high
level
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levels
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of mental
problems
including anxiety and depression.
In addition
to
this
, some
games
endow
violance
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violence
.
People
playing
this
genre of
games
show aggressive and anger
problems
.
On the other hand
, the prime advantage of playing internet
games
can be reflected in the pedagogical side. What I mean by
this
is children can learn and enhance their critical thinking and
problems solving
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problem-solving
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skills by playing.
For example
, Starcast is an online game based on the
developing
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a
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city where the player has to build his own township. There are various levels and as the game progresses the difficulty level rises.
Other
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advantage is,
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that with
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games
like Fifa,
people
from different time zones can be connected and bond. In conclusion,
while
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some
people
can
be benefitted
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benefit
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from playing
games
online by making friends from around the world or by learning various skills. The counterarguments like
withdrawl
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withdrawal
from relations, depression, and health
problems
are more imperative.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive functions
  • problem-solving skills
  • spatial awareness
  • multitasking
  • addiction
  • attention span
  • online multiplayer games
  • teamwork
  • communication skills
  • social isolation
  • economic impact
  • revenue
  • financial strain
  • stress relief
  • eye strain
  • poor posture
  • sedentary lifestyle
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