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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariosns where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariosns where relevant.
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The line chart provides key information about how many tourists visited a particular Caribbean
island
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 between the years 2010 and 2017. The units are measured in Millions of
visitors
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the total of
visitors
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 increased during these 7 years.
In addition
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, the
number
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 of tourists who stayed on
cruise
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ships
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 increased rapidly between 2016 and 2017,
whereas
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 the ones who stayed on the
island
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 plunged in 2016.
According to
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 what is shown, in 2010 there were almost 1.5
million
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visitors
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 stayed on the
island
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,
while
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 the ones who stayed on
cruise
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ships
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 were 1
million
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 less than that.
Moreover
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, during the interval 2011-2013, there was a significant soar in the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 and reached Its peak with 1.5
million
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visitors
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.
In contrast
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, the figures for tourists staying on
cruise
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ships
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 fluctuated between 0.5 and 0.25
million
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visitors
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 during these years. From 2013 there was a gradual soar in the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 with almost one
million
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 increasing every year and it reached its peak in 2017 with 2
million
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visitors
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.The
number
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 of
visitors
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 who stayed on the
island
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 was constant at 1.5
million
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visitors
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 from 2013 to 2015 and it dropped in 2016 and reached a
million
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. In terms of the total, there was a gradual increase from 2010 to 2014 with one
million
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 each year.
Finally
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, there was significant growth between 2016 and 2017 with more than 3.5
million
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visitors
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors, number, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "soar" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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