Youre is oh abing friend has asked r yo urternitu college project Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say how important New Year is to people in your country • describe how New Year is celebrated in your country • explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

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Dear Ali, I hope you're well. I'm so excited to help you with your project. Am writing

this

letter to give you some information about the New Year celebration in Iran. When it comes to New Year,it definitely is the most important festival in Iran.

This

is not only the symbol of starting the new year but

also

part of Iranian civilisation from thousands of years ago. First of all,family members clean the home and

also

they prepare some stuff for the decorating table.

In addition

to that they buy some cuckies ,fish and flowers for designing.

Furthermore

,the most fantastic thing that I like about is when the season changes from winter to spring and all the birds again start singing.

However

, meeting family and friends and gathering with them made us a memorable night . I hope

this

information will be helpful for your project.please do not hesitate to contact me if you need

further

information. Best regards, Armita

Submitted by armi.zahedi on Sun Jul 14 2024

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Include more specific details about how New Year is celebrated, such as specific customs, foods, and activities.

coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph has a single main idea to improve clarity.

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The letter has a warm and friendly tone, making it suitable for writing to a friend.

coherence cohesion

The closing and greeting are appropriately done, providing a nice structure to the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

159 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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