Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their parent. Other believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.
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What works well
2You have a clear and well-structured introduction and conclusion, which effectively frames your discussion.
Your essay presents balanced arguments from both sides, showing a good understanding of the topic.
Improvement Suggestions
2Consider expanding on your examples to provide more depth and detail. This can enhance the clarity and comprehensiveness of your ideas.
Ensure that the paragraphs flow logically into one another. You might consider adding transitional phrases to link your ideas more clearly.
Your opinion
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?