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The bar charts show the number of foreign students enrolled on two music production courses at a college in Scotland. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts show the number of foreign students enrolled on two music production courses at a college in Scotland. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts represent the number of
students
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 from five different countries who enrolled in two courses at a Scottish college.
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, slightly more
students
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 enrolled on the
music
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 production
course
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: thirty compared with twenty-seven taking
music
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 technology, and significantly more male
students
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 took the
music
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 production
course
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 than females. In total, twenty-one men compared with just nine women took
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course
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, with the greatest number of
students
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 coming from Switzerland (nine
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).
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 is more than double the number from the countries with the smallest representation, Belgium and Turkey, from where only four
students
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 attended. Interestingly, Turkey was the only country represented in
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course
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 by more female than male
students
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. Enrolment in the
music
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 technology
course
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 contrasted noticeably with these numbers in that the vast majority of
students
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 were female. Twenty-one female
students
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 took MT1 compared to just six male
students
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. Once again,
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course
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 proved most popular with Swiss
students
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, a total of eight of whom took the
course
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, closely followed by Belgium with seven and Finland with six. Of the five Portuguese
students
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 who took part, there was close to an equal division between the genders, with three females and two males. The lowest representation was from Turkey, with just one male student, meaning that
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 was the only instance of a gender not being represented from one of the five countries.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, music, course with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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