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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. HelShe has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holliday Describe some possible disadvantages Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Jane,
Finally
, you have decided to go camping
this
 summer! I think that would be lovely. By the way, I hope you know that some of our high school colleagues are planning the same trip too. So, I have no doubt that it's going to be memorable for you. Well, I am very certain that you are going to have a lot of fun during your camping vacation for a few reasons.
firstly
, since it is summer already,
this
 is the best weather for the year.
Therefore
, you and your other campmates would have no worries about extreme cold or heat. More importantly, you would be able to hike up the mountain without much difficulty. Another one is that several other tourists from different countries would be present,
hence
, making it diverse with exposure wide range of cultures.
Although
, the situation of things looks good for now,
however
, you have to be wary of wild animals, especially rattlesnakes as
this
 is the best time of the year to hunt. So, I would advise you to avoid the lakes and other swimming activities.
Also
, prevent your skin from ultraviolet radiation burns by always applying your sunscreen. Actually, I would have loved to join you on
this
 trip, unfortunately, I'm currently occupied with my final-year project for now. In the meantime, we can have a dinner date before you leave. I can't wait to see you again. Warm regards, Moses.
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single idea per paragraph
Work on ensuring each paragraph discusses a single idea more clearly. This will enhance readability and coherence.
logical structure
Although your letter is well-structured, try to refine the logical flow to make your letter more cohesive. For example, avoid the abrupt transition from discussing diverse cultures to potential dangers.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are perfect and create a warm, friendly tone.
complete response
You provided a complete response to the prompt, covering all required points: why your friend would enjoy the camping holiday, possible disadvantages, and whether you would like to go.
suitable writing tone
Your writing tone is suitable for a friendly letter. It’s engaging and personal.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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