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Band 4.5

It is thought by some that its is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside.

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Some
people
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 argue that it is
convinent
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convenient
 to reside in a metropolitan,
while
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other
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others
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 believe that
life
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 in rural
areas
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 is better . There are negative and positive aspects of both
areas
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both . On the one hand, there are several reasons why
people
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 believe that living in urban
areas
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 is better.
Firstly
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 city
life
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 is easy. It provides
the
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all sorts of facilities. Hospitals are there to provide
people
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 with medical facilities. Cinema houses ,
theaters
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theatres
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 and fast communication services are there to serve the
people
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.
Secondly
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 , cities offer a lot of chances
of
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 progress as they have
high ranked
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 colleges and universities.
Furthermore
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, sanitary conditions in big cities are very well. Roads are
also
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 wife. There are hotels, provision stores and utility stores to fulfil the needs of
people
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.
Finally
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, urban
areas
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 provide jobs to unemployed individuals.
For instance
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, in New York, unemployment is only 10%.
However
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 ,
few
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a few
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 drawbacks of city
life
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 are that
environment
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the environment
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 is very not pure .
Additionally
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,
people
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of
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in
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 cities are
also
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 like devils
On the other hand
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 , some
persons
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people
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 prefer to live in rural
areas
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 because
life
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 in
village
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the village
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 is pure and simple .Villagers do not know the evils of city
life
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 .They are sincere and honest .Countryside
areas
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 are less polluted which
van
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can
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 result in a longer
life
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 .In villages ,food and air are
also
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 pure .
However
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,there are certain drawbacks
of
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to
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 rural
life
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 .Education makes a man civilized and noble.It is sure
mean
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 for development.Chances of education are rare in the village .Individuals
also
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 don't know how to solve
theri
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their
 problems
due to
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lack
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a lack
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 of guidance. In conclusion,every place has its own value .In
case
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the case
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 of
pollution
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pollution,
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 we cannot deny rural
life
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 but for employment
cit
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city
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life
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 is crucial .I think both are mandatory segments of a state

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introduction conclusion
Ensure the introduction clearly states the thesis and outlines the points to be discussed.
logical structure
Make sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that aligns with the main point being discussed.
logical structure
Pay attention to spelling and grammar to improve readability. For example, correct spellings like 'convient' to 'convenient', 'theri' to 'their', etc.
supported main points
Be cautious of making sweeping generalizations or using phrases like 'people in cities are also like devils'. Maintain a balanced and neutral tone.
introduction conclusion
The conclusion should summarize the main points discussed succinctly and restate your main argument clearly.
logical structure
Avoid repetition; instead of saying 'cities provide this,' 'cities provide that,' try integrating these points smoothly for better flow.
complete response
The essay gives a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument, which provides a comprehensive perspective.
relevant specific examples
Specific examples like the employment rate in New York are used to support the arguments, making them more credible.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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