Some people think that robots are impotant for human's development. Other's think that robots have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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development
devolpment
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development
because how can we live without
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medical robots and smart technology like
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smartphones
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smart phones
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Smart phones
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families
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organizational structure
Your essay needs a clear introduction and conclusion to structure your response effectively.
idea expansion
Expand on your ideas with more detailed explanations and examples to fully respond to the task.
completeness
Ensure that you address both views outlined in the task before presenting your own opinion.
relevant response
You have begun to discuss the importance of robots, particularly in the context of medical technology and smartphones.
balanced approach
You have made an effort to discuss both the positive and negative effects of robots and technology.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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