The charts below show the percentage of people using private cars in five Australian cities between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the percentage of people driving private cars in five
cities
Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Perth and Adelaide over the given period.
Overall
, most cities
increased approximately 10 per cent
points, with the exception of Melbourne.
Melbourne decreased by nearly 10 per cent
point.
Looking at the line graph more closely, one can see that Adelaide went up by almost 10 per cent
point from almost 70 per cent
in 2000 to almost 80 per cent
in 2010. Perth has shown gradual
upward trend from 2000 to 2010. Correct article usage
a gradual
By contrast
, Sydney peaked at over 40 per cent
in 2006. However
, this
city dropped nearly 10 per cent
point nearly 40 per cent
in 2006 to nearly 30 per cent
in 2010.
In conclusion, all cities
have experienced an upward trend. As a result
, it pressures
Correct subject-verb agreement
pressure
all
Change preposition
on all
cities
will go up and down over the period.Submitted by garim4645 on
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