The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
The given map illustrates the new supermarkets that will be built in Garlsdon
town
, the population of the town
is 65,000 .
Overall
, as it
obvious from the map s1 Add a verb
it is
it was
market
will be constructed on
the countryside . Change preposition
in
While
s2 market
will be built on
the Change preposition
in
town
centre .
Based on the map, s1
Correct article usage
the s1
market
will be located in the northern western near to
Hindon city which contains 10,000 civilians . Change preposition
apply
Also
, it can be reached by the main roads only . On the other hand
, s2
Correct article usage
the s2
market
will be on
the heart of the Change preposition
in
town
. In addition
, it's very close to Brandson and Cransdon cities and the total amount of population for these two cities is 44,000, the thing that will make s2
Correct article usage
the s2
market
more popular and busy comparing
to Wrong verb form
compared
s1
Correct article usage
the s1
market
. Furthermore
, s2
Correct article usage
the s2
market
could be visited by railways .Submitted by fiesaidi on
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