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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The given map illustrates the new supermarkets that will be built in Garlsdon
town
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 , the population of the
town
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 is 65,000 .
Overall
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, as
it
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it is
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 obvious from the map s1
market
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 will be constructed
on
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in
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 the countryside .
While
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 s2
market
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 will be built
on
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in
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 the
town
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 centre . Based on the map,
s1
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the s1
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market
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 will be located in the northern western near
to
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Hindon city which contains 10,000 civilians .
Also
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 , it can be reached by the main roads only .
On the other hand
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 ,
s2
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the s2
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market
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 will be
on
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 the heart of the
town
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 .
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, it's very close to Brandson and Cransdon cities and the total amount of population for these two cities is 44,000, the thing that will make
s2
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the s2
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market
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 more popular and busy
comparing
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compared
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 to
s1
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the s1
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market
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 .
Furthermore
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 ,
s2
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the s2
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market
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 could be visited by railways .
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, market with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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