The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
The given map illustrates the new supermarkets that will be built in Garlsdon
town
, the population of the
town
is 65,000 .
Overall
, as
it
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it is
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obvious from the map s1
market
will be constructed
on
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in
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the countryside .
While
s2
market
will be built
on
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in
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the
town
centre . Based on the map,
s1
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the s1
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market
will be located in the northern western near
to
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Hindon city which contains 10,000 civilians .
Also
, it can be reached by the main roads only .
On the other hand
,
s2
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the s2
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market
will be
on
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the heart of the
town
.
In addition
, it's very close to Brandson and Cransdon cities and the total amount of population for these two cities is 44,000, the thing that will make
s2
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market
more popular and busy
comparing
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to
s1
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the s1
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market
.
Furthermore
,
s2
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the s2
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market
could be visited by railways .
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, market with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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