The charts below show the percentage of people using private cars in five Australian cities between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the number of individuals who were driving
cars
in 5 cities ( Sydney, Melbourne
, Brisbane, Perth, and Aldelaid
) in Australia, for ten years ( from 2000 to 2010).
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Adelaide
Overall
,in
Sydney Change preposition
apply
was
the highest Verb problem
had
percentage
of people
who were using private cars
, while
at the beginning of the period the lowest percentage
of using private motors in Adelaide, and in the last
year was in Melbourne
.
There was increasing significantly in the percentage
of Sydney it started at 70% and then
increased to 90% in 2010. In addition
, in 2000, the number of people
in Perth was 50% then
it rose to 60% in 2004 and remained the same. Furthermore
, the percentage
of people
using cars
in Brisbane increased steadily it started at 40% and increased to 50% in 2020.
On the otherhand
, the lowest number of Correct your spelling
other hand
people
using cars
in 2000, was 20% in Aldelaid, while
in Melbourne
about 30%, then
it changed in the last
year to the opposite, exactly 30% in Adeliad while
Melbourne
dropped to about 25%.Submitted by saja.alotaibi on
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