The charts below show the percentage of people using private cars in five Australian cities between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of people using private cars in five Australian cities between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the number of individuals who were driving
cars
in 5 cities ( Sydney,
Melbourne
, Brisbane, Perth, and
Aldelaid
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Adelaide
) in Australia, for ten years ( from 2000 to 2010).
Overall
,
in
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Sydney
was
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the highest
percentage
of
people
who were using private
cars
,
while
at the beginning of the period the lowest
percentage
of using private motors in Adelaide, and in the
last
year was in
Melbourne
. There was increasing significantly in the
percentage
of Sydney it started at 70% and
then
increased to 90% in 2010.
In addition
, in 2000, the number of
people
in Perth was 50%
then
it rose to 60% in 2004 and remained the same.
Furthermore
, the
percentage
of
people
using
cars
in Brisbane increased steadily it started at 40% and increased to 50% in 2020. On the
otherhand
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other hand
, the lowest number of
people
using
cars
in 2000, was 20% in Aldelaid,
while
in
Melbourne
about 30%,
then
it changed in the
last
year to the opposite, exactly 30% in Adeliad
while
Melbourne
dropped to about 25%.
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