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the chart below shows the number of households in the us by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015

the chart below shows the number of households in the us by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015
#households #income
The bar chart illustrates the yearly earnings of houses in the United States
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 three different years.
Overall
,
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the incomes fluctuated over the years. The highest was seen with individuals
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 earn more than $100,000 and the lowest was less than $25,000 with some wages remaining the same. In 2007, just under 30 households made $100,000 or more,
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was the highest figure during that time.
However
, those values
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were
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 different in 2011, where people who earned $25,000 to $49,999 had the greatest income. A similar trend was seen in 2015 to that of 2007 with the number of individuals
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whose
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 annual income was more than $100,000
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 a peak of
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around
 33 million.
On the other hand
, it is
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interesting
 to note that the proportion of people's wages between $50,000 and $74,999, and $75,000 and $99,999 remained stable at 20 and 14
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 respectively.
Moreover
, the number of houses
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with a wage of 100,000 or more was double that of people with less than $25,000 a year.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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