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The charts below show the percentage of people using private cars in five Australian cities between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of people using private cars in five Australian cities between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart above
depict
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depicts
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 the comparison
percentage
 of people driving private
cars
 in five different Australian cities,
such
 as Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Perth, and Adelaide. The data was taken from 2000 until 2010.
Overall
, all of the cities In Australia
has
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have
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 a similarity which is the citizens prefer to
use
 their private
cars
instead
public
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of public
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transportations
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transportation
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. In
sydney
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Sydney
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, the
percentation
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presentation
perception
 of citizens who
use
 public
transportations
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transportation
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 is always around 20
until
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to
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 25 per
cent
.
Initially
, still in the same city, the
using
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use
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 of private
cars
still
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is still
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 at 20 per
cent
. But, started to rise up in 2005 and 2006.
Then
, the
percentage
 decreased
until
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to
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 30 per
cent
. In
other city
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another city
other cities
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, Melbourne's
people
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number of people
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 who
use
 mass
transportations
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transportation
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 is only 18 per
cent
 from time to time. On the other side, the
percentage
for
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of
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 those who
use
 private
cars
 is about 30 per
cent
. But, plunged in 2003 and in 2010, the
percentation
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percentage
 was 20 per
cent
. In Brisbane itself, there is a good change in
use
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the use
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public
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of public
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transportations
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transportation
show examples
. Because
,
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apply
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 in 2000 it
is
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was
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 only 15 per
cent
 and significantly increased in 2010 until
reach
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reached
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 28 per
cent
.
Nevertheless
, people
at
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apply
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there who
use
 private
cars
 still remain at 40 per
cent
. Move to Perth, the total
percentage
 of citizens who
use
 mass
transportations
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transportation
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 versus private
cars
 has a very big gap which is 40 per
cent
.
Last
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The last
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 city, Adelaide has
a
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the
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 same condition
like
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as
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 Perth and the gap was more than 50 per
cent
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, cars, use, transportations, cent with synonyms.
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