The charts below show the percentage of people using private cars in five Australian cities between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of people using private cars in five Australian cities between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart above
depict
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the comparison
percentage
of people driving private
cars
in five different Australian cities,
such
as Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Perth, and Adelaide. The data was taken from 2000 until 2010.
Overall
, all of the cities In Australia
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have
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a similarity which is the citizens prefer to
use
their private
cars
instead
public
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of public
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transportations
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transportation
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. In
sydney
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Sydney
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, the
percentation
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presentation
perception
of citizens who
use
public
transportations
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transportation
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is always around 20
until
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to
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25 per
cent
.
Initially
, still in the same city, the
using
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use
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of private
cars
still
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is still
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at 20 per
cent
. But, started to rise up in 2005 and 2006.
Then
, the
percentage
decreased
until
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to
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30 per
cent
. In
other city
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another city
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, Melbourne's
people
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number of people
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who
use
mass
transportations
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transportation
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is only 18 per
cent
from time to time. On the other side, the
percentage
for
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of
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those who
use
private
cars
is about 30 per
cent
. But, plunged in 2003 and in 2010, the
percentation
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percentage
was 20 per
cent
. In Brisbane itself, there is a good change in
use
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the use
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public
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of public
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transportations
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transportation
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. Because
,
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apply
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in 2000 it
is
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was
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only 15 per
cent
and significantly increased in 2010 until
reach
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reached
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28 per
cent
.
Nevertheless
, people
at
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apply
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there who
use
private
cars
still remain at 40 per
cent
. Move to Perth, the total
percentage
of citizens who
use
mass
transportations
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transportation
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versus private
cars
has a very big gap which is 40 per
cent
.
Last
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city, Adelaide has
a
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the
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same condition
like
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as
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Perth and the gap was more than 50 per
cent
.
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