You recently had your computer fixed at a local computer store, however, you are not pleased with the service you received. Write a letter to the store manager. In the letter:  describe the situation  explain why you are dissatisfied  say what you want the manager to do Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir/Madam I am writing

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letter to complain about the unsatisfactory service of my

laptop

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at your store. I have an issue with the Mouse of HP Intel i5, replaced by one of your salesmen.

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, it's not functioning properly even after spending over five thousand. I am working as an intern in Infosyis where I use my

laptop

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daily. The mouse has been working slowly for a few weeks. I visited your shop and the salesman advised me to replace it. I have been thinking

to take

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it to the agency, but he assured me that he will put

original

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the original

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part in it and will return it the next day. The next day after paying the bill, I restarted my

laptop

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and found that the mouse

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was

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still not working and the window was not responding either. I have my important meeting lined up and some documents are stored on the computer hard disk. I am so disappointed with the service. I request you to repair my

laptop

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at the earliest within the amount that I already paid.

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, I want to see the receipt of the purchase of original parts. I am looking for your response as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Amarjot Kaur

amarjot755Thu Jul 18 2024

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task achievement

Include more specific details about the problem with the mouse and any actions already taken to troubleshoot it.

coherence cohesion

Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs to enhance flow.

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The letter clearly addresses all aspects of the task: describing the situation, explaining the dissatisfaction, and stating what action is requested.

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A polite and appropriate tone is maintained throughout the letter.

coherence cohesion

The letter has a clear structure and logical flow.

coherence cohesion

Proper greeting and closing are used, which is appropriate for a formal letter.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

207 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

repair
technician
malfunctioning
reevaluation
refund
unsatisfactory service
frequently crashing
performance improvement
charged for new parts
initially promised
lengthy repair time

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