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Band 2.5

In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all student can afford them so some think that university education should be free. Do you agree or disagree?

#study #university #students #tuition #fees #student #think #education
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To achieve a higher education
the
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scholars need to pay a huge amount of money but many of the
students
 can't afford
this
 huge
fee
structure
. From my perspective, I totally agree with the high tuition
fee
structure
 because if the
college
lower's
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lowers
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 the payment
structure
 there could be a mass number of
scholar's
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scholars
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 who come for the admission procedure. In
this
 way, the demand for a
college
degree
 could
be degrade
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be degraded
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.
For example
, every
students
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student
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go
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goes
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 for the same
degree
 which
cause
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causes
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 problems regarding
lack
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the lack
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 of job recruitment. So,
inorder
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in order
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 to balance the job equilibrium, the
college's
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colleges
college
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 have to consider a certain amount of
fee
structure
according to
degree
 demands.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 beneficial to poor
students
 who can't afford a huge amount of
fee
 if the
college's
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colleges
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 allows the
students
 to
give
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get
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 a
degree
 at an affordable rate. But in my own
view
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view,
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I'm completely stick
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I'm completely sticking
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 with higher education
fee
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fees
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 rather than the other In Conclusion, it is best to have an educational
regards
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regard
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 to the
degree
 demands in the society.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tertiary education
  • foster
  • societal development
  • economic backgrounds
  • financial constraints
  • democratize access
  • sustainable
  • compromising
  • scholarships
  • financial aid
  • tuition fees
  • oversupply
  • labor market equilibrium
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