In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all student can afford them so some think that university education should be free. Do you agree or disagree?

To achieve a higher education
the
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scholars need to pay a huge amount of money but many of the
students
can't afford
this
huge
fee
structure
. From my perspective, I totally agree with the high tuition
fee
structure
because if the
college
lower's
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the payment
structure
there could be a mass number of
scholar's
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who come for the admission procedure. In
this
way, the demand for a
college
degree
could
be degrade
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.
For example
, every
students
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go
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for the same
degree
which
cause
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problems regarding
lack
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the lack
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of job recruitment. So,
inorder
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to balance the job equilibrium, the
college's
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colleges
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have to consider a certain amount of
fee
structure
according to
degree
demands.
On the other hand
, it is
also
beneficial to poor
students
who can't afford a huge amount of
fee
if the
college's
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colleges
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allows the
students
to
give
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a
degree
at an affordable rate. But in my own
view
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I'm completely stick
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I'm completely sticking
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with higher education
fee
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fees
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rather than the other In Conclusion, it is best to have an educational
regards
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to the
degree
demands in the society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tertiary education
  • foster
  • societal development
  • economic backgrounds
  • financial constraints
  • democratize access
  • sustainable
  • compromising
  • scholarships
  • financial aid
  • tuition fees
  • oversupply
  • labor market equilibrium
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