The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.
The given pie charts
represents
Change the verb form
represent
an
average household expenditures in an unspecified country in 1950 and 2010, indicated in percentages.
Correct article usage
the
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that housing accounted for the greatest ratio in 1950, whereas
that of expenses of a household spending on food was the largest proportion in 2010 which
overtaking that of budget for housing in the previous expenses.
Starting in 1950, at 72.1%, housing was the highest spending among other types of expenditures, followed by food and education at 11.2%, and 6.6%, respectively. Correct pronoun usage
apply
However
, it is interesting to note that other types of expenditures such
as health care, transportation and others reserved less than 5%.
Six decades later, at 34%, food was
accounted for the greatest ratio among others in 2010, followed by housing and others, at 22%, and 19.2%, respectively. Unnecessary verb
apply
Budget
for transportation and healthcare increased about 4 fold and 2 fold of its previous figures Correct article usage
The budget
accordingly
, while
that of education slightly fall
0.3%.Wrong verb form
fell
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