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Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you got off the plane, you left a bag there. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter explain what has happened describe the bag and its contents say what you would like them to do about this problem

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to seek your help to find my
bag
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.
Last
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 week on Saturday from Mumbai to London; I had a
flight
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 where, after arriving at London airport, I forgot to take one of my bags. Let me explain my situation in detail. When boarding the
flight
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, I clearly remember that I had all my luggage with me.
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, I had to keep one of my bags
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 the overhead cabinet, which was far from my allotted seat.
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, when the
flight
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 landed, I was quite sleepy and in a rush reaching to the hotel as I had a meeting in an hour. So, I forgot to take that Black
bag
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 with the red strap
along with
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 me. That
bag
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 has my work files and
also
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, a tablet. After reaching the hotel, when I was looking for my file I got to know about
this
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bag
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 that I had left in the cabinet
while
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 got off from the
flight
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. Those files and a tablet are very important to me as it has all my work data so, I would request you to find that
bag
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 for me and keep it aside so that I can come to collect it as
the
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earliest
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. Kindly, fill me
with
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 the details to whom should I reach and collect my
bag
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. Thank you so much for your time. I hope to hear soon from you. Yours sincerely, Jay.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider combining shorter sentences to improve flow and reduce fragmented ideas. This will enhance readability and coherence.
task achievement
Being more specific about the details of your bag, such as its size or any unique features, could strengthen your request and help the airline locate it more easily.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is well-structured, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, making it easy to follow.
task achievement
The tone is polite and formal, which is appropriate for a letter to an airline.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unfortunate incident
  • Flight details
  • Distraction
  • Valuable possessions
  • Sentimental value
  • Lost and found procedure
  • Safe return
  • Compensation
  • Assistance
  • Gratitude
  • Follow-up
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