The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart demonstrates the profiles of Anthropology graduates of a university after the course completion
whereas
the table illustrates the incomes of the anthropologists,with an experience of five years,employed in various sectors
Overall
,
it is clear that
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about half of the degree holders preferred full-time
job
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over other opportunities.
However
, the majority of the anthropologists with
highest
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salary
package were working in the public sector. After finishing their
undergraduation
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undergraduate
course, about 52%of the graduates chose to work as a full-time employee,
whereas
15% preferred part-time work, 1/3rd of which continued on their post-graduation studies
besides
working
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part-time.
However
, about 8% , were on full-time
post graduation
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studies. The unemployed
grduates
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graduates
accounts
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for about 12%,
in contrast
, the rest of the graduates' work remained
unkonwn
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unknown
. Anthropologists were working as freelance consultants and
also
employed in both public and private divisions. After an experience of five
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their salaries vary.About 5% of the financial consultants and
the
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government job holders made an income ranging from $25,000 to $49,999.
However
, they were tripled for a
salary
of about $50,000 to $74,999.
Feelancers
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Freelancers
taking the next two
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of salaries are identical in proportion.
In contrast
, about 30% and 50% of public servants are paid with $75,000-$99,999 and above $100,000 respectively.
Furthermore
, the private employees receiving the starting
salary
range
were
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double
to
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that of the other two divisions but workers with
highest
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the highest
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salary
package were least in
this
sector when compared to the other two.
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