The graph gives information about male and female gym memberships between 1980 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph gives information about the usage amount of gyms by males and females from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
male members
had the highest overusing figures while
the females experienced fluctuations.
At first,
glance when the highest number of members
of the gym was in 2005 with 5000 male people person , and they dropped almost a thousand. İn addition, they significantly went down to approximately 1900 person in between 1990 and 1995. Moreover
, the number of male members
a smidgen climbed from 2000 2 thousand people to around 2003-2004 with roughly 4000 members
. On the other hand
, the female memberships showed erratic movements, because according to
the charts, we can observe that they initially
dramatically increased from 1980 1000 people to 1995 around 2500 members
. Besides
they experienced fluctuations for ten years period between 2000 and 2010. Also
finally
we can deduce that the gyms has
been more used by numbers of Change the verb form
have
male
than females.Fix the agreement mistake
males
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