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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrival in different parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrival in different parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line chart gives information about the total amount of travellers who visited five parts of the world during the given period. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective,
it is clear that
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 the total percentage of travelling among tourists increased noticeably, meanwhile, North
America
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 took the highest number. Diving deeper, North
America
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 and Central and Eastern Europe showed a dramatic growth
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 tourism, regarding the graph, in 1990, the Central and Eastern
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Eroup
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Europe
 stood at 30%
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 the rates went up during the following years to reach nearly 90%
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 of 2005. At the same time, North
America
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 was the only country that reached a peak of 90% in 2002, after that it had a slight decrease.
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, the other three parts; South-East Asia, Sub-Saharan Africa, and South
America
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 noticed a slight increase.
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, both Sub-Saharan Africa and South
America
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 started the period with about 10% and
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 up to approximately 20% and 18% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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