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The chart below gives information about levels of education by age range in Glasgow in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about levels of education by age range in Glasgow in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the different
age
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 ranges of
population's
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the population's
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 educational level (
University
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 degree,
school
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 certificate, no qualifications) in Glasgow in 2010,
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 the two pie charts illustrate the same information depending on gender in the same year. Units are measured in percentage.
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, from 16 to 50, the ages of
people
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's proportion of levels of education are almost similar.
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, as it gets older, the academic level is starting to decrease. In terms of the ages of 16-24 and 35-50, they are demonstrating exactly the same rate in all categories. Even the not-qualified individuals' proportion was alike, which was 9 % in the
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 between 16 and 50, 24-35
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 range of
people
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 with
university
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 degrees was higher by 5 %. Of the
age
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 range of 50 to 75, half of the
people
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 have
university
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 degrees, 20 % have
school
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 certificates and the rest weren't qualified with any education. When it comes to the
age
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 range of 75 or above, only 3 % have a
school
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 certificate and
people
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 who have no educational background dramatically increased to 72 %.
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, only one-fourth have a
university
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 degree. Genders were nearly similar and the
school
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 certificate percentages were equivalent (33 %). But men's
university
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 degree rate was slightly higher than women's (32 % and 29 % respectively).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, university, school, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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