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It is becoming very common these days for students to take courses over the Internet instead of in face-to-face classrooms.Why are more students choosing this way of learning?Is this a positive or a negative development?

#students #courses #internet #classrooms #development
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It has recently been found that more than more students prefer online lessons rather than
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 in the classroom. There are several reasons for
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 issue that will be put forward in the following paragraphs,
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 an analysis of the effect it has on society. There are a lot of people who find taking courses over the Internet convenient. The busy schedule and unsuitable place to study can be the main reasons for
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. As far as a lot of children are concerned, the
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 of lessons can not fit
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 their schedule after school.
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,
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most of them live very far from the
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 education
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 and simply do not have
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 to be in the place right in
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, especially during the
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 in a big city.
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, students tend to choose online lessons with their teachers,
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 of
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 classes
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 can have a negative impact on their academic performance,
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level of task achievements, and concentration. More and more children are trying to overcome
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 obstacle as sometimes the perception of
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 picture and
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the presence
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 of the teacher plays a significant role in
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the formation
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 of study skills.
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,
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 it seems that taking classes over the Internet is more comfortable as it does not take much
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 to travel and does not require schedule shifts, online studying can lead to
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a decrease
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 in knowledge level.
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task achievement
While your response addresses the task requirements, providing more specific examples or evidence to support your points would strengthen your argument. For instance, mention particular online platforms or studies that support your claims.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is logically structured and your argument flows well. However, ensuring each paragraph focuses on one main point could improve clarity. For example, separating the discussion of reasons for choosing online learning and its effects on students could make the essay more organized.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction is strong and clearly sets out what the essay will discuss, which is important for guiding the reader.
coherence cohesion
You effectively use linking words like 'Moreover' and 'As a result,' which helps to create a logical flow between your points.

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