The graph shows population variation in three wildlife species from 2011 to 2016 in North America and its coastal areas.
The given chart compares how the
population
of three wildlife species vary over a period of four years both in America and in coastal areas.
It is clear that
bears were by far the highest number over the period shown,while
Whales
were the lowest number especially
in 2016.
In 2011, Add the comma(s)
, especially
Correct article usage
the bear's
bear's
Fix the agreement mistake
bears'
population
was close to 2 thousadan
, gaining the least Correct your spelling
thousand
population
. Whales
and dolphins experience approximately 60 and 150 respectively. Just one year later, both Whales
and Bears increasd
, and the figures for those dramatically rose to nearly 90 and 100 thousand.
Between 2013 and 2016, bears continued to increase and the number of bears received to close to 200 thousand. Both Correct your spelling
increased
Whales
and dolphins decreased While
the Whales
remain relatively stable, at between 55 and 100, wildlife
Correct article usage
the wildlife
population
for dolphins gained a dramatically
Change the word
dramatic
decread
in 2014, and after that, it had a negligible amount in the years of 2014,2015 and 2016.Correct your spelling
decrease
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