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The tables below give information about sales of Fair trade- labelled tea and pineapples in 2010 and 2015 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fair trade- labelled tea and pineapples in 2010 and 2015 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two given tables compare the revenues from selling Fair trade-labelled tea and pineapples in 2010 and 2015 in five countries in Europe, with the unit
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in millions of euros.
Overall
, it is noticeable that there was an increase in the sales of both products in all countries, with the only exception seen in that of Germany.
Moreover
, France witnessed the highest jump in sales from 2010 to 2015
while
 it is the case for Austria in terms of pineapples. Regarding tea, almost 10th times the
sale
of
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 2010 was made in 2015, recording
at
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21
million
of
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euros, as opposed to that of Netherlands and Norway, which only increased by 2
million
 in both countries.
Moreover
, Austria
also
 achieved a significant rise in
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 in 2015 with 4
million
, doubling the figure in 2010.
Finally
, 7
million
 more
of
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tea was sold in
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 in 2015 compared to 2010. Turning to pineapple, the value of
sale
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sales
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 made in Austria was the highest in both 2010 and 2015,
whereas
 the figure in 2015 tripled that in 2010, recording at 48
million
 and 16
million
, respectively.
Additionally
, the disparity between the
sale
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sales
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 made in 2010 and 2015 in France and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 was
also
 significant, with the latter almost
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 the former.
Furthermore
, Norway’s
sale
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sales
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 rose by 2
million
 in 2015.
In contrast
, Germany was the only country that dropped its
sale
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 value in 2015, recording only 1.9
million
 as opposed to 3
million
 in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sale, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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