The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.
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the temperatures and times of sunrise and
sunset
in two cities (
London
and
Sydney
)
in
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similar weekend days in
December
2018.
Overall
, the
temperature
in
Sydney
was the highest, and their sunrise
time
was earlier than
London
,
while
sunset
time
in
London
was earlier than
Sydney
and their weather was colder than
Sydney
. In
London
, which had lower
level
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of
temperature
than
Sydney
. the highest
number of
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the
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temperature
was 13 C
degree
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degrees
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and the lowest was 3 C
degree
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degrees
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on Saturday 29th of
December
.
In addition
,
time
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of daylight at around 8:00 A.M. sunrise, and at about 15:00 P.M.
sunset
. In
sydney
, the highest
degree
of the
temperature
was 31 on Sunday 30th of
December
2018,
while
the lowest
degree
was 17 on 28th of
December
.
Moreover
, The sun rises at 5:45 and increaesed to 5:46, and
sunset
time
around 20:06 P.M. .
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