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⁠The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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The older generation often
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 to traditional values regarding lifestyle, thinking, and
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.
However
, the question is whether these principles help younger generations
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 the difficulties of today's life.
This
 essay completely agrees that traditional values became irrelevant, because of
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 and prevent young people's progress.   

Firstly
, the rapid pace of technological advancement has rendered some traditional beliefs obsolete.
For instance
, older generations may prioritize face-to-face communication over digital interactions.
While
 personal connections are essential,today's job market increasingly demands proficiency in digital platforms.
This
 disconnect can disadvantage young people in securing employment opportunities.   

Secondly
, traditional gender roles and expectations can limit personal and professional growth for young people.
While
 progress has been made, many older generations still hold conservative views about roles in society. These outdated perspectives can stifle ambition and prevent younglings from revealing their full potential.
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Ensure to wrap up your essay with a concise conclusion summarizing your main points and reinforcing your agreement or disagreement with the statement.
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The essay does a good job of identifying the limitations of traditional values in today's context.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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