The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
The given pie charts display the
age
distribution for Yemen and Italy in 2000 and predictions for 2050.
Overall
, it is evident that Yemen’s population is predicted to be younger than the one in Italy and
also
both of them are forecasted to
age
. In terms of the population in Yemen, around half of Yemen’s population was occupied by those under 14 in 2000, which is expected to decline significantly to 57.3
percent
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in the following 50 years. The proportion of the 15-59
age
bracket,
in contrast
, is projected to have a drastic growth
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11 percentage points, accounting for the greatest proportion at that time.
Likewise
, those over 60 are anticipated to increase to 5.7
percent
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. Moving on to Italy, making up about a quarter of Italy’s inhabitants, the youngest
age
group was the lowest proportion in 2000 and
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anticipated to have the same position in 2050, having a moderate decline to 11,5
percent
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.
Similarly
, the fraction of those aged 15-59, which was the greatest fraction in the first year, is estimated to fall dramatically to 46.2
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.
In contrast
, the ratio of those over 60 is forecast to soar by roughly 20 percentage points, becoming the greatest fraction in the final year.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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