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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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is argue
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 customers can go to a supermarket and buy
food
 produced all over the
worldis
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world is
 a positive or a negative
development
. Some people believe that
this
 trend has lots of benefits
while
 others don't think so. In my
opinion
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 I think it is a good
development
 with lots of benefits On the positive side, consumers can buy what they want, no matter from any corner of the world. But
this
 is far from being achieved in the past.For society,
this
 trend can
also
 greatly help the circulation of goods,
thus
 promoting the globalization of the economy to deal with possible threats On the negative side, the influx of a large number of global commodities may pose a great conflict and threat to the local commodity
market
.Because foreign goods are likely to have
high cost
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 performance and value, consumers are reluctant to buy goods produced locally, which may cause some damage to the domestic economy.At the same time, the influx of a large number of foreign
food
 may cause some difficulties for the epidemic situation and disease control and detection in the country. The
food
 imported from these foreign countries may be safe for their local
market
, but for the local
market
, it is very likely to bring different viruses, which will lead to the spread of the local epidemic. For me, I think
this
 is a
development
that is
 more positive than negative
,
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 because
although
 the influx of foreign
food
 will have a certain impact on local shopping malls, it will
also
 promote the
development
 of local
food
. Only when local
food
 is improved can they have a better economic
market
, which is
also
 a great benefit for
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coherence cohesion
To improve the logical structure, consider organizing your essay into clear paragraphs with distinct points for each argument. This will help in presenting your ideas more coherently.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction should be more engaging and should clearly state your position. The conclusion, likewise, should summarize the key points discussed and reaffirm your stance conclusively.
task achievement
While your essay covers both positive and negative aspects, adding specific and relevant examples can strengthen your arguments and provide more clarity.
task achievement
Try to elaborate your ideas more comprehensively. For instance, explain how globalization helps economic growth and provide specific details on how local food can improve.
task achievement
You addressed both the positive and negative aspects of the topic, showing a balanced view.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a logical flow, moving from one point to another smoothly.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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