The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
chart provides information about how the
number
of closing shops and the
number
of new shops in a nation from 2011 to 2018. The
number
of store terminations fluctuated significantly during the periods shown.
On the other hand
, the
number
of
stores
opened slightly increased and decreased. Looking at the information in more detail, in 2011, the
number
of closed
stores
was generally less than the
number
of opened
stores
. The figure for closing
stores
was about 6,300 and the figure for opening
stores
was about 8,500. A year later, in 2012, the
number
of opening
stores
dropped,
while
the
number
of closing
stores
exceeded. Since
then
, in 2015, the
number
of closed
stores
dropped to only 500,
while
the gap in the
number
of open
stores
reached 3,500.
Although
the
number
of store closures was very low in 2015, it exceeded the
number
of new store openings the following year.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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