These days, many people are shopping online instead of going to local stores. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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With the development of cutting-edge technology, more and more individuals tend to purchase online rather than visit nearby retailers. There are some benefits and drawbacks of
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problem. On the one hand, online shopping will help shoppers save a lot of
time
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and effort. They can continuously view different items and
stores
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in a short period of
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. Unlike conventional shopping, they have to spend a lot of
time
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moving between
stores
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scattered across the city or even not located in the city they live in. Even the worst situation is that
customers
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cannot find their
favorite
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products after spending a long
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.
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, items sold in virtual
stores
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are often considered cheaper than physical
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. The main reason is that store owners can reduce a large amount of capital when they do not have to hire too many employees or premises.
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,
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not only have more choices but
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more economical options and of course, they will prefer to shop online.
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, there is a popular online shopping platform in Vietnam called Shopee, where people can find many items from everywhere domestically or internationally. To make themselves more competitive, store owners
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as well as
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platforms implement many methods
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as
livestreams
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live streams
,
vouchers
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and vouchers
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, .... to make and that makes the prices of products extremely cheap.
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, online shopping still carries certain risks.
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with,
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cannot determine the authenticity of the product.
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of looking directly and choosing carefully when shopping in person,
customers
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tend to be attracted by low prices and sparkling model images on shopping platforms and quickly buy them.
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, the products are not as described or worse, they are useless.
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,
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on the Shopee platform, there were many people complaining because they could not buy the product they wanted.
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, the operation of online shopping is often quite complex and has many stakeholders: shopping platforms, sellers, transporters and
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. At that
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, transaction control
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becomes
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more complicated. Many problems that arise can be from many people, even from annoying
customers
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who want to cause trouble.
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, the development of online shopping is really a good sign,
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, it still has many downsides that need to be resolved in the future.
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The essay presents a well-rounded view of the topic, discussing both advantages and disadvantages of online shopping.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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