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The diagrams below show changes of a cinema from 1980 until now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show changes of a cinema from 1980 until now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps above depict changes
of
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in
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a
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the
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 cinema between 1980 and
present
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the present
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.
Overall
, there are a lot of changes that have been made,
such
 as removing
car
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the car
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 park, adding the
amount
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number
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 of movie
theaters
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theatres
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, and repositioning
of
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apply
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the toilet. In 1980, there
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 a
cark
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car
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 park
on
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in
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north
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the north
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 direction. But, now there is no parking anymore.
Also
, in 1980, only there are two cinemas, one on the corner and the other one on the right
side
. Meanwhile, now, there are five movie theaters respectively
cinema
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Cinemas
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 3, 4, and 5 are on the east
side
 and
cinema
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Cinemas
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 1 and 2 are on the west
side
. The location of toilets
still
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is still
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 on the left
side
.
However
, the
different
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difference
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 is now the toilet
have
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has
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position
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a position
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among
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in
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theaters
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theatres
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 one and two. Beforehand, in 1980, there
are
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were
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 only two facilities, which were tickets and drinks. Nowadays, the facilities
was
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were
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 added, like
foods
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food
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 and drinks are in
a
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the
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 same place and a
relax
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relaxing
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 room. Both are on the corner on the southwest
side
. On the other
sides
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side
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, there are tickets that remain
on
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in
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its
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their
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 position and
DVD
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the DVD
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 shop is on the southeast
side
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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