You will go to foreign country for one year and write a letter to agency to find an accommodation for you. Why are you going to that country What do you want for your accommodation When will you arrive

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Dear Sir, I am writing

this

letter with regard to finding suitable accommodation

according to

my needs in Abbotsford, Canada for one year. I have

taken

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admission

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the University of Fraser Valley, Abbotsford, BC, Canada for

one

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year

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one-year

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diploma in General Arts.

That is

why, I am looking for a place to stay near my university. I am afraid to tell you that I have several requirements for accommodation.

First,

I cannot live in sharing because I am vegetarian and most Canadians eat meat.

Second,

I prefer a

single bedroom

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apartment over a room in the basement because I feel suffocated in the basement.

Third,

I have a dog too, who is going to come

along with

me.

Therefore

, it has to be pet-friendly.

Lastly

, you must want to know about my arrival in Canada, which would be August 25th, 2024.

However

, I am going to stay with my relatives till August 31st and I will be ready to move into a new place on 1st of September. Please let me know if you need any

further

information. Yours faithfully, Sandeep Kaur

Submitted by ksamandeep03 on Wed Jul 24 2024

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task achievement

You mentioned that you prefer a single bedroom apartment and that it has to be pet-friendly. Clarifying if there are any additional preferences or needs for your accommodation (e.g., proximity to public transport, budget range) could provide a more complete response.

coherence cohesion

In terms of coherence and cohesion, ensure that each paragraph sticks closely to a single idea. For example, the paragraph about your requirements could be split into two: one focusing on the preference for a non-sharing, single bedroom apartment, and the other on the pet-friendly aspect, for better readability.

suitable writing tone

The letter has a very polite and formal tone, which is excellent for this context.

logical structure

The structure is clear and logical, with a greeting, clear explanation of your request and needs, and a closing. Excellent job!

single idea per paragraph

Each of your paragraphs has a specific focus, making the letter easy to follow.

complete response

You included all necessary information: reason for the stay, accommodation requirements, and arrival details. Very thorough!

greeting and closing

The closing is appropriate and polite. Well done!

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

183 words

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