Millions of dollars are spent on space research evey year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?
Some people think that a nation should spend a lot of money on
space
research
work
periodically and people say that amount should be spent on the development
work
of the country
such
as education , infrastructure, poverty etc . I partially agree with this
point of view and further
in this
essay , I will explain this
both are important whether it is development
or research
for a nation with some examples.
To begin
with , There is no doubt that space
research
work
not only gives fame to the country
but if a project is successful then
it also
enhances the economy of the state. For Example
, The New York Times revealed that NASA sent some astronauts to space
in 2016 for research
on the planet and researchers have done incredible work
by getting some informative information about space
as a result
in 2016 there was an immense boom in America's economy.
Secondly
, Developing countries should not spend more money on space
research
. Firstly
, the Government should focus on internal development
. For instance
, in South Sweden, 80% of people are illiterate because of this
reason Sweden is a poor nation among other countries . In addition
,there an authority should concentrate on giving education to the forthcoming generation because they are the future of the country
.
To conclude
, I believe that the government should only spend a minimum amount on space
research
work
so that it should not affect other development
of the country
like education , and infrastructure because this
is also
helping the country
to boost the economy.Submitted by preetiaug25 on
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task achievement
Your essay partially addresses the task by presenting both sides of the argument. However, it could be enhanced by providing a more balanced discussion and including more real-life examples where space research has significantly impacted a nation's economy or development.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure, but some sentences could be better connected to improve the flow. Use linking phrases and conjunctions more effectively to create a smoother transition between your points.
general english
There are minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasings that should be corrected for a higher score. Pay attention to verb tenses and prepositions.
task achievement
Your introduction clearly states your partial agreement and sets the stage for discussing both aspects of the argument.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your viewpoint and reinforces the importance of balancing space research and internal development.
task achievement
You provided specific examples to support your main points, which strengthens your argument.