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The diagrams below show a structure used to generate electricity from wave power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a structure used to generate electricity from wave power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagrams illustrate the scheme of how
electricity
 is generated by using
wave
 power.
Overall
, there is one general
equipment
, which helps to generate
electricity
.
Process
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The process
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 starts
from
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 taking
a
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pressure, and ends with following the lamp. Now, turning to the details,
cliff
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a cliff
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 or sea wall is placed to maintain the whole system of producing
electricity
. There are two columns and a main
turbine
.
Chamber
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The chamber
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 isolates water, which comes from
a
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the
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 sea. Diagram A shows
a
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the
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 process of
coming
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the coming
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wave
. When
wave
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the wave
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 moves to the
equipment
, air goes upward. The pressure initiates a routing of
turbine
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the turbine
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 and it starts to spin. Columns have a barrier function.
Then
,
electricity
 is generated and it follows to the lamp. It can be seen that
,
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 diagram B
also
 has the same
equipment
. The main difference
of
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two
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the two
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structure
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structures
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 is
a
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the
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 direction of
wave
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the wave
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. On the second one,
water
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the water
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 of
wave
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the wave
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 goes back to
sea
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the sea
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. When water
absorbes
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absorbs
absorbed
 from the
equipment
, air moves downward. It takes action on spinning a
turbine
.
Turbine
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The turbine
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 has
the
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an
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 equal direction with a diagram A.
Electricity
 is produced by using waves in
this
 process.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, wave, equipment, turbine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moves" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 6 times.
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