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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago, and how it appears now. Summarize the information, report the main features, and make comparisons wherever relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago, and how it appears now. Summarize the information, report the main features, and make comparisons wherever relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates the changes in a public library, especially the floor plan and what has changed in 20
years
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. It can be seen that major changes have been made over the
years
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, one of them is the
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 of the enquiry desk, which is now turned into a cafe,
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 the reading
room
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 from 20
years
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 ago has become a computer
room
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.
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 the tables and chairs have been removed,
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, self-service machines and sofas have been added over the
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. Meanwhile, in today's central
library
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 there can be found storytelling events which are in front of the children's fiction books section.
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, the
room
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 where 20
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 ago was supposed to be the children's books has now turned into a lecture
room
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, there is a section for all reference books that
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 been introduced in today's floor plan
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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