Some people think travelling abroad is a valuable experience for young people. Others think it wastes too much time and expense. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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, we are going to discuss both views equally starting with why do people think

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abroad is a valuable experience for young people

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I honestly agree with them a simple reason is the amount of new things you will be able to experience

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as food, culture and even the language all of those little details will have an impact on a young person's life those experiences will make them more

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to new ideas and easily comfortable with changes

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, all those great valuable experiences there is still a downside I totally agree with the people who are saying expense are high but I do not agree that it is a waste of time because in the future the young person will be so thankful for an experience like that at

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a young age and

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they are going to understand how lucky they were and how it is not a waste of their time or money at all.

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, I do believe if you have the expenses and you are still young between the ages of 21-35 you should do it , you would not regret it you are still young you have a whole life ahead of you what is holding you back you still do not have kids or a wife or anything to worry about only worry about yourself and your future trust me you will be so proud and pleased with yourself in the future do not overthink it just do it.

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Include more specific examples to support your points. This will strengthen your argument and make it more compelling.

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Polish your conclusion to give a more decisive opinion. This helps to firmly establish your stance on the topic.

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Your writing clearly addresses both views, making for a balanced discussion.

coherence cohesion

You present clear ideas and reasons for your opinions, which are easy to follow.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

252 words

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Some people think travelling abroad is a valuable experience for young people. Others think it wastes too much time and expense. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country?

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