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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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The pie charts delineate the distribution of
water
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usage
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 across six global
regions
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,categorized into agricultural, industrial, and domestic purposes.
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, it is evident that agricultural
usage
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 dominates in most
regions
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, particularly in Africa and Central Asia,
while
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 industrial consumption is most prominent in North America and Europe. Domestic
water
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 considerable variation among the
regions
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. In North America, industrial
water
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usage
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 accounts for a substantial 48%, with agricultural and domestic uses at 39% and 13%, respectively.
Conversely
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, South America displays an
impressve
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impressive
 71%
allocationes
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allocation
allocations
 for agricultural needs, with industrial and domestic
usage
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 significantly lower at 19% and 10%. Europe shows a different trend, where industrial
usage
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 comprises 53% of
water
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 use, leaving 32% for agriculture and 15% for domestic purposes. Looking at Central Asia, a staggering 88% of
water
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usage
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 is dedicated to agriculture, reflecting its reliance on
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 sector,
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 industrial and domestic consumption remains marginal, at 7% and 5%.
In contrast
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, South East Asia displays a relatively balanced distribution, with agricultural use at 81%, and domestic and industrial at 12% and 7%.
This
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 thorough analysis highlights the stark
disparites
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disparities
disparity
 in
water
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usage
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 patterns across different
regions
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, underscoring the varying priorities in agricultural, industrial, and domestic sectors.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, regions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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