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Some believe that a tax on companies should be introduced to reduce industrial pollution. Others believe that other measures should be taken to solve the problem. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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With the exponential progress of industrialisation, the environment has faced particular threats from factorial excess
waste
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. A sizable number of people argue that the government should impose taxes on
companies
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 in order to minimize pollution,
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 others oppose
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 idea and call for alternatives to be taken.
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 essay will discuss the two sides and explain why I agree more with the latter view. On the one hand, environmental taxes work effectively as a measure to trace down
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’
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. It is understandable why folks demand heavy taxation on
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 since
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 will restrain
factory’s
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 activities and oblige leaders to look for new ways to handle excess
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.
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,
corporations
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 may suffer from financial constraints if the policy is implemented.
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, a company must pay for hired
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, facilities, and ingredients;
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, they might collapse under tariffs for unintended
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.
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,
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 can control their
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 to just under the requirement to avoid paying taxes without taking actual
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. By that means, taxation might be the suitable solution to punish a company, not to reduce pollution.
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, others believe that different measures should be considered to solve
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 urgent issue. To make sure
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 are taking practical
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, the government can send people to inspect
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then
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 report the data.
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 way,
companies
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 will comply with the rules, take responsibility and stay disciplined since they do not acknowledge when they are supervised. Another solution
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 the effort to protect the environment is enforcing factories to spare an amount of profits on habitat conservation.
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 can be seen in the UK where industries must spend 10% of their gains on biodiversity, which caters to the demand of reducing environmental contamination
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 ensuring a functioning economy with
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 as the backbone. In the denouement,
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 the importance of taxation is undeniable, it is better for punishments to be tailored based on one’s financial situation and environmental implications. In order to sustain a stable economy
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 reduce pollution, I strongly think that governments should impose alternative solutions
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 as inspection and expenses on habitat conservation so
companies
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 are aware of their activities and take practical
actions
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.
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task achievement
Try to include more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mentioning a real company or case where taxation or other measures have worked could strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Consider refining the transition between paragraphs to make the flow even smoother. Sometimes, using transitional phrases like 'Moreover,' or 'Furthermore,' can help link ideas more seamlessly.
task achievement
You have provided a balanced discussion by addressing both views effectively and presenting your own opinion clearly.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is well-structured with a clear introduction, body paragraphs that support your main points, and a strong conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The ideas are well-organized and logically presented, contributing to a smooth reading experience.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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