An increasing number of professionals, such as, teachers and doctors are leaving their own countries to work in developed countries. What are the causes of this problems? What solutions can you suggest?
Nowadays,
tendency
of professionals,Add an article
the tendency
such
as,
teachers and doctors Remove the comma
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leaving
their countries to work in more developed ones gained Change the verb form
to leave
a
momentum.Correct article usage
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This
means a loss in number of specialists
in less developed countries.This
essay will discuss the causes of this
problem
and suggest a solution.
It is obvious that every people
on the earth Fix the agreement mistake
person
want
to have Correct subject-verb agreement
wants
a
comfortable conditions of living,which leads Correct article usage
apply
in
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to
need
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the need
of
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for
well-paid
job.Add an article
a well-paid
This
explain
one of the problems-underpay.Change the verb form
explains
For instance
,according to
an article published in BBC in 2018,a survey of specialists
salaries all across the world Change noun form
specialists'
specialist's
showing
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showed
fundemental
difference in Correct your spelling
fundamental
wage
by 165% Fix the agreement mistake
wages
of
average Change preposition
for
doctor
in well and Fix the agreement mistake
doctors
less developed
lands Add a hyphen
less-developed
while
having the same ages of experience.This
shows the underpay
of Wrong verb form
underpaying
specialists
only because of the country they live in,consequently
becoming on
of the main reasons for Correct your spelling
one
specialists
to leave the country they work in currently.
To solve this
problem
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the goverment
goverment
is recommended to have Correct your spelling
government
a special classes
for professionals with a Correct the article-noun agreement
special classes
a special class
quarantee
of Correct your spelling
guarantee
further
employment.For instance
,it is widely known that certain policies adopted by the Indian government such
as Youth Job,for its highly educated masses,reduced the negative migration of the nation.At the same time
governments can offer a contract of work for a certain period of time with Add a comma
time,
a
better conditions than the common form of employment.
In conclusion,the Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
problem
of brain drain can be easily solved if professionals will be
offered valid conditions in their home country.Wrong verb form
are
As a result
countries with the negative migration of certain specialists
can solve the problem
addressing
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by addressing
to
it correctly.Change preposition
apply
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