The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The line chart compares the numbers of members
into
various Change preposition
in
activites
in a social Correct your spelling
activities
centre
of
Melbourne, Australia, looking especially from 2000 to 2020.
The Change preposition
in
centre
remained cohort
who Correct article usage
a cohort
participanted
Correct your spelling
participated
film
Change preposition
in film
club
steadily between 60 and 65 people
over the two decades, illustrating the most popular activity in the centre
. The martial arts had the second most people
to attend, remained steady at 35 members over 20 years, but was overtaken by the table tennis club
since
2015. The amateur dramatics Change preposition
in
club
experienced a decrease trend from 20 people
to less 10
Change preposition
than 10
people
overall
, although
, following an ephemeral increase from 2000 to 2005. It is noticeable that the most growth activity in the centre
was table tennis, increased
from 15 Correct pronoun usage
which increased
people
to over 50 people
rapidly over the 20 years. The musical performances started from
2005 unlikely others, Change preposition
in
however
, increased to around 20 people
in 2020, indicating a
evident Change the article
an
protential
.
Correct your spelling
potential
To sum up
, the film club
was preponderate
in Change the verb form
was preponderated
was preponderating
this
soical
Correct your spelling
social
certre
, but most others extended over Correct your spelling
centre
this
20 years.Correct determiner usage
these
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, club, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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