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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign langulage can cause serious problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #langulage
Communication with each other has played a major role in our lives.
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,
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 of the world
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used
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the english
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english
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language
, there are
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plenty of states
which are speaking
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that speak
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a specific languages
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a specific language
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 for that particular state. All the human needs and
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the idea
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also
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 not able to do
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 way, it might be a
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crucial
 social and practical issue for all the
citizen
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citizens
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 who stay
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 a particular
country
.
According to
 my point of view, I have entirely justified
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the mentioned statement.
This
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the social problems and the practical issues which might
be happen
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 in the
counrty
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country
. On one hand, by considering the social issues, it can be mentioned that the misunderstanding and based on that, inhabitants might
be
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behave in an inclement manner. When a person
who
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live
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lives
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 in a
country
 and
speak
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speaks
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 their mother
language
 will be
got
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easy to
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 their fundamental human needs
.
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otherwise
, they may be
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affected
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to
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 the
inconveniouns
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inconvenience
.
For instance
, we can consider
about
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the person who might
be visited
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visit
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 and learn about the fresh adventure
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of
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thr
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the
 new state. If they
are not understand
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do not understand
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 the
language
 properly, they
are
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 not be able to go through or observe the cultural changes.
On the other hand
, that person will have to face a number of
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obstacles
due to
 the
language
barriers
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. For
an
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example, we can consider
about
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a student who
migrate
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migrates
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 to
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a Europican
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Europican
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European
country
 as Italy for his or her higher education and that student are willing to
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a jobs
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jobs
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. For that purpose, if that
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has
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 not sound
litaracy
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literacy
 and the
ablity
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ability
of using
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Italian
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language
,
definetly
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definitely
 he
has
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 to
be fails
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 and face a lot of difficulties.
For
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 conclusion, It can be mentioned that
,
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 living in
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 using
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a county
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county
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country
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 is affecting as a social and practical issue. In fact
that
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, as fulfilling basic human needs and education
pattern
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patterns
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 and
also
 doing a job.
This
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argue
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that
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the obstacles of
stay
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staying
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 in a
forign langusge
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foreign language
 using
country
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a country
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.
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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly presents your position and outlines the main points you will discuss in the essay to provide a clear roadmap for the reader.
task achievement
Expand on your main points with more detailed explanations and specific examples to provide stronger support for your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more logically, ensuring each paragraph contains a single clear idea and flows smoothly to the next.
coherence cohesion
Improve clarity by using more precise vocabulary and checking for grammatical accuracy to ensure your ideas are conveyed effectively.
task achievement
You have a clear understanding of the task and have attempted to address both social and practical problems related to living in a foreign country.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which is essential for maintaining a logical structure.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication barriers
  • social isolation
  • language proficiency
  • career advancement
  • access to services
  • cultural misunderstandings
  • miscommunication
  • assimilation
  • essential services
  • frustration
  • isolation
  • employment challenges
  • healthcare
  • legal assistance
  • cultural norms
  • social friction
  • language barrier
  • restrict job opportunities
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