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The table shows the results of a survey of people's perception of celebrity news coverage.

The table shows the results of a survey of people's perception of celebrity news coverage.
#results #survey #people #perception #celebrity #news #coverage
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The provided table illustrates the proportions of people's
response
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 to three specific questions about famous
news
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coverage
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.
Overall
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, Most
of
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apply
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individuals believe that celebrities
shown
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are shown
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 too much in
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news
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the news
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.
Moreover
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, they believe that
due to
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news
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 organisations,
celebirities
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celebrities
 cover media a lot and
also
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 they thought that television
news
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are
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makes up the vast majority of
coverage
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.
Survey
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A survey
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 think that influencers
viewed
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view
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 too much in
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news
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the news
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 with 85%
while
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 others believe that they
shown
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are shown
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 not enough
with
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6% before, some argue that they receive enough amount of coveragewith 7%.
Vast
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The vast
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 majority of
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the survey
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survey
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surveys
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 argue that
news
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 organisations are the main responsible
about
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for
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this
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coverage
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with
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56%
while
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other
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the other
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 36% believe that
due to
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 the public, celebrities
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are shown
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shown
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showed
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 a lot.
Lastly
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,
the
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apply
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60
percent
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per cent
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 of
questionnaires
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the questionnaires
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 thought that television
news
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 gave the most
coverage
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 to famous
while
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 some people
argue
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argued
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 that internet
news
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 websites gave
most
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the most
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coverage
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with
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apply
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15%
after
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apply
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,
people
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and people
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 who think newspapers gave the most
coverage
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 with 12%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words news, coverage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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