The table shows the results of a survey of people's perception of celebrity news coverage.

The table shows the results of a survey of people's perception of celebrity news coverage.
The provided table illustrates the proportions of people's
response
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responses
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to three specific questions about famous
news
coverage
.
Overall
, Most
of
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individuals believe that celebrities
shown
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too much in
news
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the news
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.
Moreover
, they believe that
due to
news
organisations,
celebirities
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celebrities
cover media a lot and
also
they thought that television
news
are
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makes up the vast majority of
coverage
.
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think that influencers
viewed
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too much in
news
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the news
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with 85%
while
others believe that they
shown
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not enough
with
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6% before, some argue that they receive enough amount of coveragewith 7%.
Vast
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majority of
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the survey
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survey
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argue that
news
organisations are the main responsible
about
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for
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this
coverage
with
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56%
while
other
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36% believe that
due to
the public, celebrities
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are shown
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shown
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a lot.
Lastly
,
the
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60
percent
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of
questionnaires
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thought that television
news
gave the most
coverage
to famous
while
some people
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that internet
news
websites gave
most
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coverage
with
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15%
after
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,
people
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and people
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who think newspapers gave the most
coverage
with 12%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words news, coverage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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